Today for the summer learning i had to write a letter to my friend about me going to another country
Hi Lukah i'm going to this country called aotearoa. it is very far and i'm very very nervous to go to this country. my voyage is gonna take a long long time but can you come to new zealand and visit me.
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Hi Te Pounamu,
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you added a person to write to, it make your written more genuine. Also, it's really good that you wrote about your emotions and this can always brings a sense of authenticity to any text.
However, in order for you to gain the full points for this activity, I would like you to try to write a bit more about the journey. have you consider write 2 messages one during the journey and one explaing your impressions when you arrived in this new land called Aotearoa New Zealand? Could you try to do that and let me know?
Keep up with your good work!
Kia Kaha,
Patricia